Thursday, July 23, 2015

The Treasure Galleons - the script - the book - the mini-series!

It's official. The Treasure Galleons is a BOOK!

After winning 8 (actually 9, but I must keep the latest win under wraps for now) awards, including 2 wins, the screenplay has been adapted into a very colorful novella. Chock full of original paintings by the talented Peggy Gross (my mommy), it also sports a wonderful cover painting by Cornish painter Ralph Curnow. The painting also marks the midpoint of the story.

You can order now, or better yet, get your SIGNED PAPERBACK at the wonderful book signing event Monday, July 27th at the very spot where the events happened exactly 300 years ago (Vero Beach, FL).

Hope to see you, but if I don't, be sure to order that ebook. The more copies distributed, the more likely it WILL be made into a MOVIE (or a mini-series)!!

Thanks for your support!

Monday, December 29, 2014


For months I've been working with a development producer on an epic screenplay. The historical dramatization of...


It's still a work in progress, but a couple weeks ago I decided to get some quick, objective feedback from a few contests (often a cheaper & more effective way to get fast, honest feedback than hiring consultants).

So far I've heard from two contests...

  2. WeScreenplay International: I've advanced to QUARTER FINALS! (they announce on New Year's Eve)

Ironically, I haven't gotten the wanted feedback yet, but I'd say the placements tell me something!

In a couple weeks, I'll be talking with my development producer about how to proceed with MAKING IT INTO A FILM in 2015!!!

The website for The Treasure Galleons is currently an info-only semi-private site intended to help me lay out the facts (I'm also writing the book version) as well as to give visuals to potential investors & production decision makers. But I'd love your reaction/feedback to it if you have time:

Wednesday, September 3, 2014

History in the Making

More to come, but let's just say things have gotten interesting since my last post. Four of my screenplays all garnered new interest this past week. That means I have four screenplays to look at with fresh eyes & do some rewrites. That means, as usual, very little time to devote here.

EVANGELINA - A multi-award-winning feature based on true events. A traumatized teen, who is either crazy or psychic, tries to help the victim of an unsolved murder to find peace.
more awards info:

UNDER THE WILLOW - A short version of the touching true story of Chicago's strategic & spiritual importance at the dawn of the Civil War. A troubled young man finds purpose for his life when he joins the cause for God & country.

A PIRATE'S CHOICE - An award-winning short about the humble beginnings of a later-to-be famous pirate in the early 18th century.

THE TREASURE GALLEONS - The epic true story of Florida's Treasure Coast... A family endeavors to bring treasure from New Spain to the king in Old Spain despite pirates, mutiny, a hurricane, family tragedy, & much more.

Gotta get to work on ’em, but I'll be back with updates...

Thursday, April 3, 2014



OK, in re-reading Part I, it's obvious that there is nothing more boring than reading a story with a writer (especially a braggart) as the lead character!

But, this is about writing & it's my assumption no one else is REALLY reading this, so here's part II...

The winning script was completed at a 48-hour retreat put on by the good folks (Signe & Bob) at the Great American Pitchfest (GAPF).

The setting was inspiring for a spooky thriller: the haunted hotel where Stephen King wrote "The Shining" in the Colorado Rockies.

To capitalize on the weekend's theme, I decided to set aside all my historical story projects and work on an idea for a paranormal thriller I'd outlined one weekend after learning about a heartbreaking unsolved murder.

With screenwriting guru Pilar Alessandra to guide us through a day of exercises to get us going, a group of dedicated writers sat in an old room filled with ghost-like vibes, and eked out our outlines and several pages, then for the next two days we wrote...and wrote. Two of us completed our scripts while everyone went away with a strong start.

About a month later we all converged on GAPF to pitch our now complete and polished projects. I had lots of requests.

The next month I took my story to my private critique group and they tore it to shreds. I took the notes to heart and made revisions then entered a couple of contests, just to get more outside feedback.

The feedback was helpful, so I made more revisions/tweaks and entered several contests, again just hoping for feedback & MAYBE a placement.

Apparently those final revisions did the trick. The script has done well in all but one of those contests, winning the grand prize at StoryPros.


Now back to the historical stuff that really floats my pirate boat...

Wednesday, February 5, 2014

GRAND PRIZE: I won another contest! A big one this time.

GRAND PRIZE: StoryPros International Screenplay Contest

My script was up against about 825 scripts, so it's kind of a big deal.

If I can't brag on my own blog, where can I?

I received notification at the end of a very long & ironic day on December 15, 2013. I had spent the entire day sending prizes for my services for the first cycle of a contest that I had just co-founded: Reel Writers Screenwriting Competition.

When I got the call, I didn't know what to expect since I found a phone call (from anyone) to be an odd method of contact for an online contest. It never once occurred to me that I could have won. In fact, when the very nice guy, Jeff, told me I was Grand Prize winner, I did not believe him. I thought someone was messing with me. When he convinced me it was legit, & that he had personally really loved the script, I had to stop him & ask...which one?

Two of my screenplays were entered in the contest. While I had done some tweaking to make both better, I had actually entered them into the contest for the feedback. It had mildly surprised me when both had moved on to the finals round, but I attribute that to good prose.

I know that I have an advantage over other writers with my good grammar skills (though I'm as susceptible to typos as anyone, & without someone else to edit me, mistakes do happen!). And I do know the "language of screenplay" better than most spec writers. After all, it's what I do for a living - correcting others' prose.

But as a fluid storyteller, I do struggle quite a bit. I fully understand the craft, but it's very difficult to execute.

So it never dawned on me once that I was a serious contender for any prizes! And it was anyone's guess which script had captured their judges' attention.

Shroud of Mystery is the realization of an idea I'd had back when the Shroud of Turin was in the news a lot when scientists had erroneously carbon dated it, pronouncing it a fake from the Middle Ages. It's probably the best original story idea I've ever had. However, turning it into a compelling thriller has been a very difficult process, & frankly, it still needs a lot of work, even if it did make it to the top 4% of the pile.

Evangelina was an idea that germinated a year or two ago after watching one of those dumb paranormal TV shows that try to convince people that there is "evidence" where in the end there always is none. This episode was no different, but there was a storyline that caught my attention. A teen claimed to be communicating with the spirit of a dead girl with whom she identified. It turns out that the dead girl's story is all over the internet, so there's no mystery how the teen got all the details about the dead girl, but what struck me in the story was how that poor girl was murdered 20 years ago, & not only has the crime never been solved, but mediums like these phonies on the TV show have been coming out of the woodwork to keep the tragedy active, dangling hope in front of the mourning family without ever providing any answers.

So I asked: What if a medium turns out to be schizophrenic, truly believing that she's communicating with the murder victim, but never really sure since it's possible she just read about it on the internet & forgot?

Thus, my grand-prize-winning script was born: Evangelina.

I can't end my story about the contest without mentioning the extraordinary way I was able to flesh out my story from idea to script, but I'll save that for next time...

Wednesday, May 22, 2013

1st place for short screenplay.
To read the version I sent to the contest, CLICK HERE!

Wednesday, October 24, 2012

Gross Dialogue Tip

Trust me - the following is not a commercial of any sort. This is about dialogue, so bear with me for a moment (or just skip down to the very last few sentences if you're in a hurry!)...


Have you tried this new product?

It was featured in a recent SHARK TANK episode.

Now, in your head, how do you pronounce it?

Some will say
“Pro-nerg” as Mr. Wonderful did.

Some will avoid pronunciation. It’s all letters:

The correct pronunciation is “Pro N.R.G.” Get it? Pro Energy.

So why isn’t it spelled
 Pro N.R.G.?

ING Direct had fun with this problem in their early marketing, always making it to look as if ING was the end of a longer word being blocked somehow. Meanwhile, they insist now to be called
“I.N.G. Direct” - so why are they not spelling it like that!?

The ambiguity and confusion hurts marketing. Ambiguity is not good in marketing and can be disastrous in screenplays.

And clarity is why screenwriters (and novelists) must spell things out in dialogue, including numbers, symbols, initialisms, abbreviations, etc.

But it’s only ONE reason why. In screenplay, the other reason is to keep the truth of the page. One scripted page equals one minute of screen time. Reducing
“seventy-five smackaroos” to “$75,000” does not represent the time it takes to say it, and it does not make it clear how to pronounce/phrase it.

Which indicates a third reason to spell out things in dialogue in screenplays: How things are said reveals your character's voice:

mobster: seventy-five big ones
banker: seventy-five thousand dollars
Joe Schmo: seventy-five thousand bucks
IRS form: "$75,000" 

And the fourth reason is clarity. In dialogue, the "IT girl" would be a shout about that girl who possesses the X factor. The "I.T. girl" is the girl who works in the Information Technology Department.


IN DIALOGUE, always spell out your initialisms AS THEY ARE PRONOUNCED:
F.B.I., O.K. (or okay), T.V., etc.

Acronyms are a whole different animal. Pronunciation trumps all, so there is NO punctuation: MADD, VISA, INTERPOL, etc.

To be clear when you have a word that could go either way, your actor will know what to do depending on how/if you punctuate:
ASAP, A.S.A.P., AWOL, A.W.O.L, R-O-L-A-I-D-S, etc.